Friday, August 30, 2013

What do Women Want (reflection)


What Do Women Want  

by Kim Addonizio:



From the perspective of a man who has never seen or understood the inner workings of the female mind, this poem is both insightful and frightening, working to confirm many thoughts I've had to try to explain the workings of the common female psychosis.  This insight is combined with the striking womanly image of the revealing red dress.  The fact that it was written by a woman and it gives such a sinister tone to the attitude of the woman speaking in first person adds a dimension of honest self criticism to the poem that deepens the already profound insight.



So, according to this poem, what do women want?  She says she wants a red dress, but following in the fashion of the female mind, the red dress really isn't what she wants.  Shortly after saying she wants a red dress, she says she wants to wear it until someone tears it off of her.  What does this mean?  Apart from the obvious, it means she does not want to simply take it off for someone or give herself to someone.  She wants to be desired enough by someone for them to take her, to independently decide they want her without her having to put effort into seducing them.  She wants to be an object of desire.  She describes being seen by people she presumably knows in a part of town that sounds dirty and populous wearing her skimpy dress, adding an air of exhibitionism to her wish to be seen as an object of desire.



But following again in the ever-complicated fashion of female thought, it isn't that simple.  Near the end this new character, "you" is introduced, and she wants to confirm his (I assume it's a man) worst fears about her and show him how little she cares about him.  Now, this character could be an ex or even a current lover.  It could be one of her parents or any figure she has perceived as an figure of authority or influence in her life, but the specifics don't really matter.  The point is that she has revealed that she wants the red dress to be a sexual object of desire to spite someone else she feels somehow deserves her scorn.  I am inclined to believe it is some kind of lover or ex-lover situation, evoking some of the symbolism of the scarlet letter, where she is choosing to be an adulteress.



The ending of this poem turns the symbol of the red dress into a metaphor.  More than just an item of clothing it becomes a symbol of a choice of identity like "choosing a body", and that she is, at least in this moment of heated emotion, determined to maintain this chosen identity until she dies.  These last few lines are particularly revealing.  They reveal her association of an item of clothing with this promiscuous persona, that she is choosing this persona out of malice rather than genuine desire, and that her thoughts are not rationally based.



So, ultimately, what do women want?  Well... this woman wants a red dress to be a sexual object to scorn someone and continue scorning them until she dies.  This woman wants to cause painful retribution and fill a gaping hole in her self esteem.

The Street (reflection)





The Street by Stephen Dobyns:

"The Street" has a lot of cleverly worded, vivid imagery of a city street, describing the pedestrians as an insightful onlooker.  I'm intrigued by the nature of this poem, presumably being to describe a painting and the thoughts the painting gives the writer about the characters depicted.  In some places it could be taken as a tongue-in-cheek criticism of the painting, particularly the bit about the mother carrying off the grown baby that isn't really hers and is "very old", as the baby it is referring to doesn't really look like a baby in the painting.  I personally enjoy the metaphor of a girl disciplining her red ball and the baker who had half a thought and now stands awaiting another.

This poem, I think, suffers from trying to sound more profound than it really is in some places.  The first stanza is the one I take most issue with, which is bad for the poem as it should set the tone.

Across the street, the carpenter carries a golden
board across one shoulder, much as he bears the burdens
of his life.  Dressed in white, his only weakness is temptation.  Now he builds another wall to screen him.

The line "much as he bears the burdens of his life." has no contextual significance, adding nothing to the imagery of the scene or the character being described.  Is it that he bares his life burdens across one shoulder or just that he bares them and why does his having life burdens mean anything?  Are the boards the burdens of his life?  What is added to the imagery by adding this cliché sounding phrase?  Shortly after, the phrase "his only weakness is temptation." presents similar issues.  Both phrases suggest these dead-end ideas about the character that are contextually irrelevant, very difficult to visualize, and the writer does not elaborated on them.

The ending carries some neat insight but I question the ultimate relevance of it as well.  It says "these nine people circle each other... ...identical lives begun alone, spent alone, ending alone." This seems to detach from the painting it is describing, as the Asian couple and the mother and her very old baby are directly interacting, both in the painting and in the poem. The Asian couple are even having a particularly romantic moment.  My disillusionment toward the ending of the poem cheapens its minor insight.


Comfort and convenience are far too noisy.
What ever happened to silence?
When is the least you heard it?
More than quiet
More than calm
There's something ancient and profound
in a moment in which
there is nothing to be heard.

Revision-

A moment in which
There is nothing to be heard,
Something ancient and profound.